RER: Television Argument

“The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug.”
― Mark Twain, The Wit and Wisdom of Mark Twain

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  1. 1: Old Statement: “But this is part of her point, she believes that on TV, it never actually shows people actually WATCHING it, it never shows the truth about how lazy everyone is nowadays, and no one in this digital age will ever get up and do the things they are doing digitally because its too dangerous or hard to do.”

    New: “But this is part of her point, she believes that TV never actually shows people actually WATCHING it.”

    2: Old Statement: “Leisure has become the high scene, now that everyone can be leisurely its turned us into all lazy bums because we don’t want to put forth the effort to exercise, to eat right, or anything that requires hard work.”

    New: “Leisure has become the high scene, so much so that everyone is lazier for it.”

    3: Old Statement: “Of course, with this “Digital Age” and more money in your pocket, you feel less and less the need to exercise because they are barely any just left that don’t need a diploma or a college degree, because most jobs today have a digital aspect to them, airplane pilot, electrician.”

    New: “With the digital age, people work on the digital side of things, leading to even more laziness.”

  2. Old: Well if that person wants to be in their shoes they should go out and find a pair that fit, not only find them but wear them.
    New: If a person wants to be in those shoes they need to make it happen.
    Old: I challenge those people to step out of their false reality and do not fall into a remedial pattern, because they will become addicted to laziness.
    New: One is bound to get addicted to laziness if they don’t step out of their false reality.
    Old: The sheer fact that it’s cold or rainy outside should not promote laziness, it should promote resilience.
    New: Even bad weather should promote resilience, not laziness.
    Madeline Friend period 3.

  3. Old (33): If people found a way to put their energy into something productive, then maybe, every once in awhile, people could watch other people watching TV, because they rarely get to do it themselves.
    New (10): People should start putting their energy into more productive activities.
    Old (24): If people started doing things that they see on television, there would be absolutely zero people to watch television, since that is hardly shown.
    New (17): If people go out and do things the see on TV, no one would be watching it.
    Old (26): Like in the novel Fahrenheit 451 by Ray Bradbury, Mildred is alway needing the multiple televisions to be on and her seashell earpiece to be singing.
    New (12): In Ray Bradury’s novel, Fahrenheit 451, Mildred is constantly surrounded by technology.

  4. Old: Men, women and children who have been born into the lower-middle clas don’t know what it’s like to have wealth, so they watch a television show where the character or characters are rich.
    New: People in the lower-middle class watch to know what it’s like to be rich.

    Old: Someone who didn’t have the opportunity of a further education may watch a show about intelligent people, or maybe tune in to an educational program.
    New: Someone with less education may tune in to an educational program.

    Old: This allows viewers to find out what is going on in other places, and to keep up to date on events in their local area.
    New: This allows viewers to know what is going on in the world around them.

  5. Old: The Worst Years of Our Lives, by Barbara Ehreneich, cause the reader to thik the work could be about a horrific event, such as WW2, but actually it states her view on television.
    New: The Worst Years of Our Lives, by Barbara Eheneich, shows the tolls of television.

    Old: A young, aspiring, bass, fisherman could watch the daily 7:00am “Fishing with Bill Dance” in order to figure out why the fish hiding under the roots did not take his frog.
    New: By watching “Fishing with Bill Dance,” inexperienced fishermen can outwit Bass with new tactics.

    Old: Without ESPN, young soccer players would never dream of scoring a bicycle kick from 18 yards out, or dreaming of scoring a penalty kick with ease and grace.
    New: ESPN gives kids a dream of what they can be like if they work hard at practice.

  6. Old #1- In the classic novel “Charlie and the Chocolate Factory,” a young boy named Mike TV is the perfect example of lack of individualism.

    New #1- The novel “Charlie and the Chocolate Factory” portrays a boy name Mike TV who lacks individualism.

    Old #2: His experience takes away the genuity of his actions because he is following what he thinks is right, he follows an unwritten script.

    New #2- His experience portrays the usurping of his individualism.

    Old #3- He is so submerged in the idea that everybody loves the way he acts, that he forgets who he was.

    New #3- The dillusion that everybody loves his fake self cause him his to lose his true self.

  7. Old #1: Although the majority of action pack movies display scenes that arent suitable for audiences to try out at home people are still watching TV. (24)
    New #1: People still watch TV despite the the unsuitable circumstances. (9)

    Old #2: Kids eyes will get glued to the screen for hours on end watching some pointless show, “Teen Mom” or “Two and a Half Men” wasting away their time because they’re too lazy to get off the stinky, old couch and do something productive with their life. (46)
    New #2: Watching ” Teen Mom” and “Two and a Half Men” glues kids to the stinky, old couch and lacks production in their lives.(22)

    Old #3: TV does inculde negative side effects but it’s still around to this day as a popular vote by teens who want to be informed about the world and lounge around doing nothing. (33)
    New #3: While lounging around doing nothing, TV informs teenagers about the world’s circumstances. ( 12)

  8. Old: Given this, Ehrenreich is correct, a stay at home dad is not nearly as exciting as saving the world, there fore he is not televised as entertainment. (26 words)
    New: A stay at home dad lacks excitement, therefore Ehrenreich is correct because he would never be televised. (17 words)

    Old: They simply sit around on their butts all day trying to be more entertained by technology, and become so busy with that, that they have no time lefto ver to do anythinginteresting and worth attention (36 words)
    New (Split into 2 sentences): These people simly sit around on their butts all day trying to obtain more pleasure from technology. With all their time wasted away, none is left over to create entertainment. (17 and 13 words)

    Old: She is correct that regular people cannot match the level of entertainment that is displayed on television, but because of the diversity among society, her statement could never be fully supported. (31 words)
    New: Most cannot match the level of entertainment displayed on television, however diversity among society proves this calumnious.

  9. Old #1: everyone has had a day in their lives when they wake up feeling like they can conquer the world, then half way through the day resort to watching tv instead. (30)
    New #1: One wakes up feeling ambitious, then resorts to watching television instead. (11)
    Old #2: By accepting the televisions perception of the world, and allow oneself to become numb to human emotion, all ambition to experience life is lost. (24)
    New #2: By accepting the televisions perception of the world, all ambition to experience life is lost. (15)
    Old #3: For example, the first time one watches an advertisement for helping striving children in Africa, they feel sympathetic, and want to help the poor beings. (25)
    New #3: The first time watching an advertisement for helping starving children in Africa, one feels sympathetic. (15)

  10. Old 1: Without seeing the world and only seeing everything inside his head the connection to reality becomes weaker and there becomes no longer a need for what is real.
    New 1: Only seeing the world inside his head, forces the connection to become weaker.
    Old 2: Televisions do not only bombard is with advertisements and the next best thing, but also gives us a false world.
    New 2: A false world is sold to us through advertisements.
    Old 3: Without the want to watch television people would strive to do more with their lives than sitting on a couch in front of a bright screen.
    New 3: Without the bright screen, people would do more with their lives.

  11. Old statement: “Americans are being controlled by the things on television that prevent them from doing the necessary things in life which not only consist in physical exercise but in mental exercise.” (30)
    New statement: “Television, a force controlling Americans, has effortlessly decreased the physical and mental exercise accomplished by Americans.”(16)

    Old statement: “By sitting on a couch for an entire night straining a person’s eyes in the dark munching on snacks and unhealthy foods, the health of that person is affected, but most importantly they are missing out from other opportunities that could consume their time in a more worthy way.”(49)
    New statement: “Harming your health by watching television not only affects your health, but also consumes your valuable time.” (17)

    Old statement: “People must use their television time for socializing too because watching television for many hours on end affects the mind.” (20)
    New statement: “Television time must be used for socializing considering that it affects your mental state of being.”(16)

  12. 1 Old; “If the new James Bond movie showed him watching TV, nobody would want to watch it, because nothing, absolutely nothing, is happening.” (22)
    New; “If the new James Bond movie portrayed him watching TV, nobody would want to watch it because nothing is happening.”
    2 Old; “Even though people back then probably couldn’t’ help but let television shows influence their lives slightly, TV was not a big part of their lives, so producers could make shows much more realistic and not have anyone watch TV in them, because people would maybe watch their one show a week.”(51)
    New; “Because TV was so insignificant back then, people might have been more easily influenced by what they saw.” (18)
    3 Old; “Even kids need a limit, because you see them calling their parents bad names- because that’s what they see portrayed on television.”
    New; “Limiting children to TV access is important because they imitate what they see.” (13)

  13. 1- Old: If a person was really a doctor, or strived to be one, they wouldn’t be spending hours on end watching a Hollywood, sugar coated version of life in a hospital.

    New: A real doctor would be in the hospital, not watching a Hollywood, sugar-coated version.

    2- Old: People spend hours watching well groomed actors portray fake lives and characters as the pine away at pretending to be what they see.

    New: Hours are given to groomed actors living utopian lives, by the pining public.

    3- Old: But as they are watching these characters be a family, their own is not experiencing unity or memories to last a lifetime

    New: As the characters create a family, their own becomes sectionilized and devoid of lifelong memories.

  14. 1 Old: For example, a child in the early 20th century would have gone to the local park to play basketball instead of sitting on their couch to play it on the Xbox.
    New: In the early 20th century, a child would have gone to the park to play basketball. Nowadays, children sit on their couch and play it on the Xbox.
    2 Old: In the early 1900’s when news papers and magazines became popular adults had to walk or ride a bike to the nearest newspaper stand to learn of the current events.
    New: Before TVs and the internet, adults walked to the nearest newspaper stand to learn of current events.
    3 Old: Because of the advancement in technology and the creation of computers and televisions the view on Americans has changed from a productive and active people to a couch potato society.
    New: The creation of computers and TVs has caused the perspective on Americans to change. Once viewed as an active and productive country, the United States is now a couch potato society.

  15. 1. Old: “People who make and write TV shows know that in order to keep their audiences interested they have to think of situations that will keep the viewer’s attention.”
    New: “TV show writers know that their programs must be interesting to keep an audience’s attention.”

    2. Old: “Entertaining as these hi-jinks may be, they’re unrealistic because most people don’t get into such crazy situations all the time, mostly because they’re usually watching TV.”
    New: “These entertaining hi-jinks are unrealistic to real life because people just watch TV versus trying new things.”

    3. Old: “If more people really thought about how they are watching so much of their lives away being entertained by a character’s “life”, then maybe more people would actually get up and go do something more productive.”
    New: “If people realized how TV is wasting time, they would be more willing to do something productive.”

  16. 1.) Old: Cartoons and acting that actually contain anything that could be supplemental to one’s mind are almost obsolete, excluding, of course, this step-by-step walkthrough shows that are always showing safety disclaimers.
    New: many purposeful shows have become obsolete, replaced by crude cartoons and reality tv.

    2.) When kids see someone jump off of their roof, do a double-backflip and land — safely — on their feet, despite the use of Hollywood Magic, an excited child may be compelled to try it.
    New: kids may try to replicate dangerous actions shown on television.

    3.) Scientists have stated that the bar for society’s mental intelligence has been notably lowered, and it is not unlikely that television plays a major role in it.
    New: television could likely play a part in the dwindling of society’s intelligence.

  17. 1: Old: From sweeping a large percentage of gold at the Olympics, to generation the strongest companies today, America knows little defeat.
    New: America knows little defeat in any kind of competition. Winning large percentages of medals at the Olympics and owning the strongest companies is the norm.
    2: Old: Decades have passed since he started seriously watching TV, and he is now so reluctant to do anything else that he stopped getting up for work, which resulted in him getting fired, and he only moves to get food.
    New: Decades have passed since he started serioulsly watching TV. He is now so reluctant to do anything else that he stopped getting up for work. This resulted, of course, in his job loss. And he only moves to obtain food or relieve himself.
    3: Old: In the Pre-Television Era, sitting for more than an hour was nearly unbearable to the average American.
    New:Before Televison Era, sitting for above an hour was nearly unbearable to the average American.

  18. 1- Old: “Barbara Ehrenreich demonstrates this in ‘The Worst Years of Our Lives’ as she talks about how televisions used to show activities people actually took part in but now show many different genres of shows, most of which depict things real people do not do.” (44 words)
    New: Barbara Ehrenreich, in her article ‘The Worst Years of Our Lives,’ demonstrates the differences in television shows.

    2- Old: “Besides all of the crime-fighting action shows and the other shows depicting the dangerous extremities of life, there are reality shows about people trying to help make the world a better place.” (33 words)
    New: Along with all the action shows, there are also shows about people trying to better the world.

    3- Old: “A person does not have to have a special gift like this to make a difference in the world, but most people are much too lazy and much too content watching their fantasies becoming a reality on TV to go out and put themselves to action.” (46 words)
    New: One does not have to have special powers, just the will power to get off the couch.

    Michael Moser, Period 3.

  19. 1. Old: (28) As Barbara Ehrenreich explains in her novel The Worst Days of Our Lives, we have a very strange relationship with television, one that is paradoxical on many levels.
    New: (21) As Barbara Ehrenreich explains in her novel The Worst Days of Our Lives, the relationship we have with television is paradoxical.
    2. Old: (28) The irony of this situation is that the television-watcher’s actual life is so boring that it cannot “be televised for more than a fraction of a second.”
    New: (9) There is a layer of irony to this situation.(20) The television-watcher’s life is so boring that it cannot “be televised for more than a fraction of a second.”

  20. 1) Old: People have tasks to do besides watch TV, even though people will not cease watching watching because it “would involve getting up from the couch.”.(Line 24-25) (24 Words)
    New: People have word to do, even if it “would involve getting up from the couch.”. (Line 24-25) (15 Words)

    2) Old: It’s illogical to believe that people have enough resources to duplicate the actions as seen on TV just to proof they are not a couch potato. (26 Words)

    New: People should not be expected to duplicate actions on TV to proof they are not couch potatoes. (17 Words)

    3) Old: Also, many people have an active social life, causing trouble with friends, first dates with attractive strangers, or rage quitting on Call of Duty at four in the morning. (29 Words)

    New: Also, many people have a busy lifestyle, like dating or rage quitting on Call of Duty. (16 Words)

  21. Old: People watch, hoping they can elict emotions that they would not normally use–or want to use–in every day life. (21 Words)
    New: People watch TV hoping to elict all their emotions willingly. (10)
    Old: The witness recieves a lump in their throat as though they swallowed an egg, their eyes swell up red and puffy like the worst allergic reaction ever seen, and the only place they can seem to put their face is into their own, sweaty palms and weep uncontrollably. (48)
    New: This movie tears the heart into tiny pieces inside the chest. (11)
    Old: Not because these girls see their own lives in this movie, rather because they want to believe in something that won’t seem to show up on their own doorstep. (29)
    New: The only way the idea of true love stays alive is with TV (13)

    Freddy Lienhard: Period 3

  22. Old: (25) Television is inaccurate and unrealistic but it is what normal people want to think their life is like even though no one’s actually is.
    New: (13) Normal people want to believe in the unrealistic portrayal of life on television.
    Old: (24) “Couch potatoes” flourish in today’s electronic society and live day to day going to work, coming home, watching tv, and going to bed.
    New: (16) “Couch potatoes” flourish by living every day just by working, coming home, watching tv, and sleeping.
    Old: (26) Work cannot be done everyday unless there is time to unwind and watch some crazy model attack someone or catch up on the latest “Modern Family.”
    New: (15) Relaxing in front of the tv watching “Modern Family” could be essential to working everyday.

  23. Old: Directors, writers, producers, actors, and many more people who help the process of creating amazing stories use their imagination to create a new scene or act it out differently.
    New: The hard workers who help create amazing stories have to open their minds to create no ideas.
    Old: The world and the people who live on it would no advance without different points of view of each individual’s minds.
    New: The world could never advance without different opinions.
    Old: The actors had to become bazaar fictional characters, the writes had to put every ounce of energy into an astonishing script, and the director works his mind for hours to create a better scene.
    New:Every part of entertainment takes different and individualized skill.

  24. I did the make up so, my topic was different.

    old: As things like welfare become easier to get and many get it just because they can we see people who do not need it because they work for a living.
    new: As financial aids like welfare become easier to obtain even those who get by fairly decide they must also get welfare.

    old: People should not be forced to give up their luxeries for people that do not always try to break free from poverty.
    new: People should not be forced to help those who do not try to first help themselves.

    old: For example when Hiatti was destroyed by an earthquake America and its citizens donated millioins out of their own pockets to help restore their town.
    new: American citizens donate much of their money to 3rd world countries in need, like Haitis when it was destroyed by an earthquake.

  25. Old: Plug them in turn on the TV and suddenly the world people have so silently submurged themselves in has crept to a new world, full of danger and adventure.

    New: Plug them in and turn them on and suddenly the world changes into a place full of danger and adventure.

    Old: TV’s have poisened our minds howing us samples of realities that could never be, clinging to this illusion we have created we flingourselves onto the couch to watch the madess unfold.

    New: TV’s have poisened our minds forcing us to cling to the couch and screen waiting to see what madness unfolds next.

    Old:When you walk into a store like Best Buy what is the first thing you see, it is not the computer or camaras but the 60 inch brand new Samsung TV, the tag smiling at the unsuspecting buyer whispering I have voice recognition, I can hook up to newer devices and the internet.

    New: In Stores like Best buy the first thing you see when you walk into the door is the 60 inch Samsung TV with all of it’s new toys like voice recognition.

  26. old: Ehrenreich tells that people back then were more active in what they did and what they saw done. Although TV in the past got people active,in modern day it makes people just sit, watch, and wish. Many shows and movies such as “Avengers”, “Skyfall”, or even “Family Guy” do impossible and dangerous things that people cannot truly do.
    new: Ehrenreich tells that people at the time of new TV’s were more active in what they did. Although TV in the past got people active,modern day makes people just sit, watch, and wish. Many shows and movies such as “Avenger”, “Skyfall”, or “Family Guy” do impossible things that people cannot do.

  27. however, these masses are watching worlds that are entirely different from our own, with feqw couches and feqwer tv’s.
    However, these masses watvh worlds different from ours, with minimal couches and televisions.

    They analyze hpw the cast of the show enacted an experiment, and theorize on the variables of the show.
    They anaylze how experiments were enacted and the variables of the show.

    Adventure Time is a show that follows a boy named Finn as he runs around and helps out anyone who could use a hand.
    Adventure Time is a show that follows a boy as he gives a hand to anyone in need.
    -Brandi Mason

  28. Old: Some people assume that everything on television can be done and that they themselves will go out one day and experience an amazing, wild, car chasing, celebrity life.
    New: People assume that they will one day experience an amazing celebrity life; just because it airs on television.

    Old: Sure, it is real people doing real stuff, but there are so many edits and cuts and even retakes that it is not even reality anymore, and that is what many people forget.
    New:People forget that reality television is filmed in multiple takes, therefore it is not real.

    Old: Think about what your are really watching if it is the Kardashians to Fox News, one needs to break the illusion and try not to catch the disease.
    New: One must think about what they are viewing to not get caught in the illusion.

  29. Old: Coco is married to Ice-T, the famous Law & Order actor, but she still goes and gets her hair done at a salon like one’s mother.
    New: Coco is famous, yet she still has her hair done at a salon–just like one’s mother.

    Old: Normal, real, modern women–be they middle class, high society, or not-so-well-off–go to the gynecologist.
    New: Women of all social classes and backgrounds go to the gynecologist.

    Old: Another real-life scripted moment is when Phoebe runs into her ex-boyfriend at the coffee shop while with her new boyfriend.
    New: Another moment is when Phoebe encounters her ex-boyfriend while with her new boyfriend.

  30. 1. Old- Problems such as overall unhealthiness, lack of exersize, drug abuse, violence and childhood obesity are particularly concerning because, for the most part, they are preventable.

    New- Problems in today’s society are particularly concerning because most of them are preventable.

    2. Old- Americans also have monetary issues and so less and less of them are going to see movies or pay for gym memberships and ‘family board game night’ has become obsolete.

    New- Americans also have monetary issues and so less of them are going out to do expensive tasks.

    3. In Fahrenheit 451, by Ray Bradbury, society has completely become engulfed by technologies such as television and Montags wife, Mildred, sits, staring at walls of images projected on them all day, and literally has become nothing.

    New- In Fahrenheit 451, by Ray Bradbury, society has become engulfed by technology, and mildred has become nothing.

    Bridgette Petzoldt
    Period 3

  31. #1: They themselves do not go through the “exciting” lives that the actors have, so they are drawn towards the television in the hope of learning something new about the world.
    Revised: They themselves do not live the actor’s lives. This draws them towards the television inthe hope of a new world.
    #2: The new world of television drones on while blank stares look back, hooked on to the colors flashing.
    Revised: Blank stares watch as the television drones on.
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    #3: People throw themselves at the scenarios given and, in turn, tune out to the productivity that could he happening

  32. #1: They themselves do not go through the “exciting” lives that the actors have, so they are drawn towards the television in the hope of learning something new about the world.
    Revised: They themselves do not live the actor’s lives. This draws them towards the television inthe hope of a new world.
    #2: The new world of television drones on while blank stares look back, hooked on to the colors flashing.
    Revised: Blank stares watch as the television drones on.
    #3: People throw themselves at the scenarios given and, inturn,tuneout to theproductivity that could he happening around them.Revised: People tune out the productivity that hapens aroun them.

  33. old1: Many would attribute this to other factors, but studies – and common sense – have told us that television is a very large factor in a child’s lack of exercise.
    New1: Many attribute this to other factors, but studies show television is a large factor in children’s inactivity.
    Old2: During the early modern American times, when luxuries such as cars, movie theaters, and television were in their nascent stages, the babysitter played an important role in society.
    New2: During early American times, when cars, theaters, and television were nascent, the babysitter played an important role.
    Old3: People have told me personally that they have had nightmares after watching these shows; and while some nightmares can be written off as mere coincidence, the overwhelming majority have been associated with watching these types of far-fetched programs.
    New3: People tell me they had nightmares after watching these shows; while some are coincidence, most associate with watching rubbish.

  34. 1 Transendentalists, like Emerson, believe that dissent assists their endeavors to stand against the moral wrongness of government.
    Revised: Transendentalists believe that dissent assists in their endeavors to stand against the moral wrongness in government

    That was my longest sentence.

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